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*and dependable and to not be the weak link in a small team | *and dependable and to not be the weak link in a small team | ||
− | + | ::''Every manager knows who the weakest link on his team is, and that that person can drag everybody else down. At Five Guys, in particular, it's a real team and the Fries Guy is crucial. It also is informative that you know how important teamwork is.'' | |
*(playing defense on my high school soccer team taught me this too). | *(playing defense on my high school soccer team taught me this too). | ||
− | ::This reinforces the idea that you know how important dependability and teamwork are, and adds that you must have gotten your good grades necessary to get into Purdue while spending a lot of time at sports practice, making those grades extra impressive. | + | ::'' This reinforces the idea that you know how important dependability and teamwork are, and adds that you must have gotten your good grades necessary to get into Purdue while spending a lot of time at sports practice, making those grades extra impressive. '' |
*My parents live in Bloomington, and I would like work within driving distance of home. | *My parents live in Bloomington, and I would like work within driving distance of home. |
Revision as of 11:51, 27 April 2021
Cover Letter for Getting a Summer Job
Here is a cover letter. I will follow it with an explained version.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I suddenly find myself looking for a summer job, internship, or volunteer opportunity. Paid employment would be the best, but engineering-job experience is what I really need, and I am willing to sacrifice money for experience. I just finished my freshman year of Engineering at Purdue with grades good enough to keep my scholarship there, though my only engineering courses so far are Honors Engineering I-a and I-b. I did a lot with Python and my writing ability is well above average (my verbal SAT was xxx). I worked as a "Fries Guy" for Five Guys in high school cooking french fries, so I know how to be punctual and dependable and to not be the weak link in a small team (playing defense on my high school soccer team taught me this too). My parents live in Bloomington, and I would like work within driving distance of home. Resume attached.
Sincerely Yours,
Benjamin Won Rasmusen
[email protected], (812) 331-1123.
Here is the annotated version, explaining the significance of each part.
- Dear Sir or Madam,
- It is even better, but not necessary, to use the addressee's individual name. Use it if you know it.
- I suddenly find myself looking
- This is a delicate allusion to the fact that you are looking for a job in late April, when you should have been writing to them in January.
- for a summer job, internship, or volunteer opportunity. Paid employment would be the best, but engineering-job experience is what I really need, and I am willing to sacrifice money for experience.
- You want to convey that you don't need the job to earn money, but to learn, and that if necessary, you'd take a zero-pay job with great experience instead of a high-pay job with no useful experience. But you also want to say that money is nonetheless attractive.
- I just finished my freshman year of Engineering at Purdue
- This says that you are a smart guy but with no engineering experience. You need to tell them your weak points. They will soon realize them anyway, so face up to them.
- with grades good enough to keep my scholarship there,
- This conveys two things: (a) you got high grades, and (b) Purdue valued you enough to give you a scholarship.
- though my only engineering courses so far are Honors Engineering I-a and I-b.
- This reinforces the message that you are smart but inexperienced.
- I did a lot with Python
- Python is a very good skill to have.
- and my writing ability is well above average (my verbal SAT was xxx).
- Writing ability is an unusual skill for an engineering student to have, so this shows you have an unusual strength, and provides some evidence for that, as well as reinforcing the message that you are smart. They can assume that you have a high math ACT score; you don't have to tell them that, and it would sound like boasting, not necessary conveyance of information.
- I worked as a "Fries Guy" for Five Guys in high school cooking french fries, so I know how to be punctual
- Being punctual is hugely important and informative about your moral quality and work ethic, so having worked in fast food and not gotten fired is actually a huge credential for you.
- and dependable and to not be the weak link in a small team
- Every manager knows who the weakest link on his team is, and that that person can drag everybody else down. At Five Guys, in particular, it's a real team and the Fries Guy is crucial. It also is informative that you know how important teamwork is.
- (playing defense on my high school soccer team taught me this too).
- This reinforces the idea that you know how important dependability and teamwork are, and adds that you must have gotten your good grades necessary to get into Purdue while spending a lot of time at sports practice, making those grades extra impressive.
- My parents live in Bloomington, and I would like work within driving distance of home.
- Employers like students who live at home, where they can't have rowdy parties. This also explains why even if you are an extra-good job candidate you would be willing to take this employer's job instead of one with Google or Tesla off in a distant state.
- Resume attached.
- Your resume will have lots of other important details. You shouldn't try to put everything in a cover letter; this one might have too much in it already.
- Sincerely Yours,
- Standard, boring, conventional valediction, best for not distracting from the rest of your letter.
- Benjamin Won Rasmusen
- The middle name is distinctive, so they're more likely to remember your application, and will make them a bit curious about you, because they'll wonder why you were named that way.
- [email protected], (812) 331-1123.
- You want it to be really convenient to contact you, even if they lose your resume.
You should rewrite this in your own personal style. Keep the substance the same, but use words that would come naturally to you.